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Creepers sweep the arched roof
and the brick exposed walls
of a cottage,

becoming like a jungle temple in the sticky summer air,
moist and humid, it sinks into legend

autumn red now,
thick,
like veins,
they stretch

an exercise in constriction,

“we’ll choke this creature dead!” each leaf whispers,
evil in the winter wind, as they sleep and dream of ruins.

and down at the lake, below thin surface tension,

(more solid now that at any time before)

fat slate fish glide, catching currents, holding on,
to be heaved, their dorsal fins like fanned tongues lapping arctic rime.
©2004-2009 ~betweensmiles
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exactally what i said! now READ!

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:iconventurus:
good, could be trimmed for greater effect, i think.

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Mimesis
:iconbetweensmiles:
i think so too - thanks i'll get to work after i have finished my creative folders :)

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:iconmizzmarsh:
How did i miss this! I love reading your work and i haven't heard it for sooooo long! This is really good, grasps the imagination and you can really feel the poem! great! God, its just so good to read your damn poetry! how are things?
:iconmizzmarsh:
neat piccie to by the way!
:iconbetweensmiles:
things are great - got a First on my creative writing folder and i'm getting mental help

aside from that i think that i am doing better than usual and i have more poetry to put on soon :)

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:iconsqoggle:
ooh 'as each leaf whispers'...lovely

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peeling onions gave me an excuse to cry.
:iconfatelessmirror:
now that is a great way to put something so vividly in my head!

read one, read twice, it shall never suffice!

so what do you way, why do you say what you say, and why do choose not to slip back into it?

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